
The poem below has been written for Carrot Ranch Double Ennead Monthly Poetry Challenge No. 5, conducted by Colleen. This challenge starts with the double ennead of 99 syllables reduced to 48 syllables to 24 syllables to finally, a haiku (12 syllable poem).
Double ennead (6/5/11/6/5)
The pale green butterfly
seeks a pale green leaf
wanting to spread his body on his shelter
fluttering his wings and
breathing the leaf’s scent.
Breathing in a way that
only the leaf hears.
His tiny chest heaves and falls to the music
of the dark, roaring sea
and his eyes quiver.
The butterfly travels
alone to his land
of hazy dreams where he drinks from pale flowers
that has a shade of green,
the leaf unaware.
48 syllable poem (3 stanzas 4-7-5)
Pale butterfly
spreads his body on the leaf
breathing in her scent
His chest rises
to the music of the sea
as his eyes quiver
Butterfly soars
in dreams and drinks from flowers
the leaf unaware
24 syllable poem (1 stanza 6-6-6)
Pale butterfly finds home
in leaf only to chase
his unfulfilled yearning
Haiku (12 syllable)
flailing summer
he leaves life
finds home in mirage
Each version speaks of temporality. I liked the leaf throughout too, a temporary refuge.
Yes. The butterfly’s uncertainty even after it finds its ‘home’ and it’s longing to be elsewhere (at least in dreams). Thank you so much for the comment, Avery. I am glad you liked this.
Butterflyâs . Please let me know if you get the picture.On Wednesday, July 14, 2021, call2read wrote:
> nightlake posted: ” The poem below has been written for Carrot Ranch > Double Ennead Monthly Poetry Challenge No. 5, conducted by Colleen. This > challenge starts with the double ennead of 99 syllables reduced to 48 > syllables to 24 syllables to finally, a haiku (12 sy” >
This is stunning! I love the imagery you created around the life of this butterfly. Thanks so much for hopping on to this challenge. ❤
Thanks a lot for the encouragement and the opportunity, Colleen. I am very happy you liked it. Thankfully, I was able to submit before Monday:)
I’ll do a recap on my author blog at colleenchesebro.com on Saturday. That will help to share your lovely poetry to other readers as well. I’ll have a new challenge up on Monday. Thanks again. ❤
Thank you. Looking forward to the new one:)
Wow, you have woven the life of this pale green butterfly so beautifully dear, the words you chose and the flow, I soo loved it. Well, I do always.
We are never satisfied, we get one thing and we long for another one, at every step out yearnings soar higher than before. Loved your haiku.. “leaves life.. finds home in mirage” so deep..
Excellent!! 🙂❤️🤗
Samreen, thank you for your heartfelt words. You are always very kind.True that we humans are never satisfied and neither is the butterfly (it looks like that, right?😊)
And I am so glad your WP is working again. Thank you for lifting my mood:))
You are more dear😊😊😊💖
Lovely image of a Geen-veined White (Pieris napi) – I have a deck of cards that Id’s 52 Butterflies 😀
Thank you for sharing the link. I like every version. But I am a fan of poetry and butterflies.
Thank you, Jukes, for taking the time to read and comment:)