Ligo Haibun Challenge – Life

This week we have two quotes for the Ligo Haibun Challenge. I chose the one by Rumi.

“Not only the thirsty seek the water, the water as well seeks the thirsty.”
ligo haibun

As the fisherman’s daughter moves the net, a captured fish wakes to the sound of waves crashing near the hut. It struggles for breath and the waves roar at lives stolen from its bosom. Fish desires sea and the water longs for its missing children among millions. The struggling creature reminds the girl of her baby brother who took his last breath the previous week. She picks the fish and runs towards the sea.

Water boils

as deep sea fish

pleads for a drop

35 thoughts on “Ligo Haibun Challenge – Life

  1. A very original interpretation of the Rumi prompt. Some brilliant perceptions: ‘waves roar at lives stolen’ sounds like something Yeats would have written! Absolutely wonderful – your poetry has advanced so much over the period that I’ve been visiting your blog. Congratulations.

    • Just wondered if the fishing folks would every feel sorry for a fish (another life), and this narrative was the result..Thank you so much for reading and your kind words, Soumya:)

  2. This is more than flash fiction – it is poetry, metaphor, truth and philosophy all wrapped in one. Truly one of your best – if not the best ever 🙂

    Very well done indeed, Padmini.


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  5. I was watching a cooking show – the once vegan stated that the recipe needed fish sauce…sorry fish. But it just wasn’t quiet the same without that ingredient. The sea shares so much and cries – perhaps that is why it is so salty? I like the gentleness of this piece even though their was sadness too.

    I missed the submission – this challenge wasn’t open a full seven days or is it normally only open for 5? I thought I had until tomorrow since it opened on September 6 I thought it would close on the 13th.

    Not to worry – I’ll live 🙂

    • Thank you so much for your comment on this piece. Maybe the sea only wants to share water, but we are stealing the living and breathing creatures from it? Just an idea:)

      Jules, it is probably best to submit within the first 5/6 days of the challenge. It is not open for a week, a little less than that. I’ll send you the challenge link this week. Have suggested the idea of mailing list to other hosts. Once it is decided, we’ll let you know:)

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