Friday Fictioneers – Inside the Oak Tree

wasp-nest

“I have hidden the ruby in the large oak tree.” gasped Ned, the thief, in his last confession

“Which tree?” asked Detective Banks, hurriedly

“There is only one in the forest.” whispered Ned

Those were his last words. Ned had evaded the law for a long time. His latest conquest was big; an expensive ruby. The police had spotted him in the deep forest and fatally shot him.

Banks’s eyes turned huge with greed. Nobody else had listened to the confession. He sped in his bike towards the forest. Ah! There was the lone oak tree. Banks stood near the tree, studying it, when he felt a sharp pain in his hand. He looked up to see a hornet’s nest. They thronged him before he could think or react.

The ruby was safe inside the hornet’s nest. The faithful hornets were determined to guard it till Ned returned.

Written for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. Thanks to Janet for the photo.

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55 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Inside the Oak Tree

  1. A stinging ending to your story! Even if Ned hadn’t trained them, I think it’s safe to assume that anyone sticking their hand into that next would get stung. Good imagination!

    janet

  2. ‘Faithful hornets’ are hard to imagine, but they made sense in your story. I got a little hung up over your explanation of who Ned was. I was trying to work out if it felt too much in the passive voice, and wondered whether the information could have been got across in a more active way with Banks wondering what had happened to the ruby? Just a thought. There was a lot here to get into a short story.

    • Not really:) They may accept fellow thieves who worked with Ned in training the bees. If Ned was working alone, the ruby would probably be undiscovered for a long time.

  3. Wow, trained hornets as a burglar alarm….kind of scary and quite effective. Made me want to know more about Ned and how he had the patience and time to train hornets when he was living a life on the lam.

    • He needs an escape route and a place to hide his valuables. So, he should have probably spent a lot of time going about the training. Thank you, Jennie, for reading and commenting

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